What I found especially interesting is how it moves outward without feeling disconnected. It starts in the mind but then gradually becomes about systems, power, and control, and it doesn’t feel like a jump. Lines like “chains read as policy” and “restricted bodies” feel grounded in something real, not abstract. And then you bring it back into more symbolic imagery with the wax wings, which reads almost like a warning about being pulled toward something that looks like power or truth but isn’t.
Wow.... wax wings partnered with false light was brilliant. And the outcome, it melts. Final outcome, it's gone. What imagery. You are such a talent Mandy!! You truly are gifted and talented but the kicker is, you are genuine. You are real. YOU REALLY CARE. YOU ARE SO SO SO SPECIAL! I am so proud of you! Great job, Ashley 🩶
Love it!
And that quote from Galatians, what a great way to wrap it up. 🙏
Thank you :))
That image is stunning.
Thank you so much <3
I love a haiku! This was phenomenal!
So good!
"stars feel far above
under maps rewritten in blood
still we reach, we shove"
Impressive stringing haikus together this way :)
Thank you :) I heard about a haiku sequence on Poetry on Tape a few weeks back. I just can't remember who from.
What I found especially interesting is how it moves outward without feeling disconnected. It starts in the mind but then gradually becomes about systems, power, and control, and it doesn’t feel like a jump. Lines like “chains read as policy” and “restricted bodies” feel grounded in something real, not abstract. And then you bring it back into more symbolic imagery with the wax wings, which reads almost like a warning about being pulled toward something that looks like power or truth but isn’t.
Really beautiful! Love your writing!
Makes me reflect on things that are going right now. Enjoyed reading this.
Thank you Edward.
wax wings near false light
melting under power’s weight
falling out of sight
Wow.... wax wings partnered with false light was brilliant. And the outcome, it melts. Final outcome, it's gone. What imagery. You are such a talent Mandy!! You truly are gifted and talented but the kicker is, you are genuine. You are real. YOU REALLY CARE. YOU ARE SO SO SO SPECIAL! I am so proud of you! Great job, Ashley 🩶
Definitely feel this tension right now! Beautiful sequence.
just beautiful. X